Visualising sound - crit feedback and alterations

The feedback I received from the crit was fairly positive, everyone praised the rhythm pattern I had created and agreed that they all understood how it worked once I explained it to them but that was the problem, the fact i had to explain it, it was said that a key was probably going to be needed to give clear instruction on what the pattern s and how it works.

I have now created a key in using Gill Sans bold which is what I have used for the title, I now need to apply it to the design in a way that does not effect the simple clean aesthetic which I have created.

They also said that the majority preferred the white background and the rectangular layout to any of the colour designs as it was commented that it is visually more like a piece of music this way which links well to the way I have formed the pattern, it also allows the main features to be prominent on the page. 

One of the major pieces of feedback I received was, as I was planning to screen print these posters, having a solid coloured background would make it seriously difficult to accurately and successfully screen the print without bleed and incorrect placement of each colour, so this helped me make my final decision of which design to continue to develop.

I took the feedback and started to apply the changes that had been suggested, I started with creating a standard grid which the pattern would follow to make sure each shape is correctly placed.

I then started to play around with different placements of the key, which was actually much more difficult than I expected,  I didn't want the page to end up looking like a double page spread of a magazine, so I was trying to make the key compliment the piece rather than be a hindrance 

 I finally produced the outcome below which I thought suited the design the best, however I was still not happy with the overall layout and borders surrounding both the pattern and the key.

I thought by maybe adding a red background to the key would help separate it from the rest of the design.

I added an additional strip of black and red at the top which would be unique colours for each different design created for a different song.

 I then wanted to see what scale I should have the pattern and by testing this I actually found i preferred a smaller scale, with a larger clear space surrounding. the mid scale was best suited as it would still be clear enough to see each individual element but not to big that it swamps the page.

The smaller one does look awesome as well but I think at A2 it would but too small to be legible, especially from a further distance.

Finally I added the + and - to the beginning and end of the piece to convey where to start and finish as well as which way to follow the pattern.

i am much happier with this outcome and think it sits nicely on the page with a good contrast of space and image. the layout is clear and simple to follow with the key explaining the different elements of the pattern.